diff --git a/script.fountain b/script.fountain index 2c098e9..1185c23 100644 --- a/script.fountain +++ b/script.fountain @@ -4,13 +4,13 @@ Author: Dan Jones Notes: Story for "The Siege of Remontel" text adventure game. Contact: -Draft date: 2022-01-10 +Draft date: 2022-01-23 === INT. BUNK -The bunk is closed. It is dark. Our protagonist is laying in her bed. A red alert klaxon is blaring, having woken her up. +The bunk is closed. It is dark. Our protagonist lies in her bed. A red alert klaxon is blaring, having woken her up. PROTAGONIST (V.O.) What in the world is that? @@ -37,8 +37,7 @@ As her feet step down, the alarm stops. A boatswain's call is briefly heard, fol PIRATE LEADER (ON SPEAKER) Attention crew of the USS Remontel. Your captain, bridge crew, and senior officers are in our custody. Your ship is under our control. - -PIRATE LEADER (CONT.) + Anybody who attempts to oppose us will be met with a swift end. If you stay where you are and do not interfere in our plans, you will be released safely shortly. The protagonist stands there, a bit dumbfounded. Why would someone capture this, of all ships? The Remontel is one of the most insignificant ships in the fleet.